We all get off on fantasy.  I started writing some fantasies that make me excited.  Then I stopped, thinking they might be a bit too explicit.  LOL

I have this nasty side, don't we all!  I just don't want to give the wrong impression.  Are these too nasty to publish?  Honest opinions are truly appreciated.  

I'm also accepting fantasies for this page from anyone who cares to publish their own anonymously or not, your choice.

First off, I am not a professional or any thing, so blow me off, if you want.  2nd, I would crawl over cut glass to be in one off your fantacies.  But, your writing doesn't make me believe that those are really your fantacies.  They sound like they are what you expect other people to want.  Try and let more of yourself out.

I've heard professor's say that about papers I've written when I was in college!  "Dig deeper"! is what they say.
Mist, my fantasy with you would be to in one of the malls during christmas time and by chance I see you go into a ladies changing room, and discretely saunter in after you. Preferably one without any cameras.  When I enter you're in Victoria secret bra and panties. We embrace and kiss.  I bury my face in your breasts, and you massage Jim, jr. and he begins to move northward with a quickness.  The rest of this scene is for you to use your imagination.
Love ya, Mist!

Great!  I just read the "At The Office" one.  OMG, now how am I supposed to get any work done today?  I think I am going to have to schedule an office visit.

Misty, keep up the fantasy postings. It's healthy for all to enjoy and gives everyone a little break over the course of the day!

Misty
Please mail me a fantasy including both of us that we can live out. Maybe we can share it when complete.  Hehehehehe

Misty,

You forgot some of my all-time favorites, like the old "Omega has a horrible industrial accident and gets his balls caught in a menacing taffy-pulling-machine-like contraption that turns out to be Misty" fantasy!

I agree with the previous poster who said you weren't digging deep enough, the ones you wrote are pretty vanilla compared to what we all know you're capable of, so let loose the inner Misty.

One word of caution though, be careful not to stray too far from what you're actually willing to try.  I've seen some pretty detailed fantasies spelled out on provider sites, but it's frustrating for hobbyists to inquire about them only to find out they're purely fiction and the activities described in the fantasy aren't available to hobbyists.

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Misty,

I think my opinion is mostly the same as the others here, but I might phrase it a bit differently. I think you have some good ideas, but not much of a story.

You need to spend more time building up to the real action and then describe it for a longer period of time. Not necessarily in more detail, but in more words. The climax of one of the stories, "Soon, you do just as told", is just a little to much like "he did it and then rolled over and went to sleep." You get to the excitement and then move past it, like most of us in real life. A story needs to be bigger than life, it needs to be something we can relate to, and in this case, something we can relate to wanting hence the term "fantasy." Both of these sotries have me showing up, doing a few minutes of work and nodding off. I think I have been there.

For me the real fantasy is thinking I actually satisfied her and hearing the details of that encounter. Yes, a real fantasy!

These stories, while I do think they are a good start, are far to simple, even for men. We might be quick, but we do need a little bit of a build up.

This is only meant as constructive criticism, not malicious. Just my thoughts when trying to be helpful.

Big Ol Bob

I'll work on it further and keep you posted.  I get a bit shy when exposing myself.  Time to open up the barrel of fantasies.

I think its wonderful! I say post more!!!

Crum

There are a number of erotic story sites where you can post your work.  Try literotica.com, which will allow anyone to post.  Cleansheets.com is like an on-line magazine that will accept or reject your work.  Serious writers of erotica consider it to be a prestigious site.  If you want to get serious criticism of your writing, go to zoetrope.com, where you can post stories and people will comment on them.  You, however, have to do some critiques yourself.  Good luck.