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HAHAHAHAH!!!!!!!! chicken lips!!!!!!!! :D eom
Blowing Chunks 596 reads
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Posted By: inicky46
For the following line:  
   
 "She took my shaft deep in mouth and licked it with her poultry lips."  
   
 "Poultry lips?"  I guess he meant "pouty," but still.....It conjured up this image....  
 

Blowing Chunks2177 reads

Not necessarily in terms of length but more about the way it was written.  Even our thesaurus friend Duplicitous can learn a thing or two from this guy. :D

http://www.theeroticreview.com/reviews/showReview.asp?Review=86046

Related Link: http://www.theeroticreview.com/reviews/showReview.asp?Review=860463

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And looking at her web site.. perhaps there is a real reason for the inspiration

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inicky46512 reads

The review is so poorly written I could only get two lines into it before Conan discovered so many errors in spelling and grammar (the guy clearly has no idea what tense means) I would not subject myself to any more abuse.

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TalkToTrees623 reads

When I saw how BIG the review was... I'm like... what the fuck? How many hours did this guy take to write that drivel up?

To what end was he trying to prove with all of that bullshit?

Yea, I checked out that lady's website, sure she's great looking, but come on a short story for a review? I'll pass!! I'll stick with the other reviews that are more to the point.

The Forest Waits

Posted By: inicky46
The review is so poorly written I could only get two lines into it before Conan discovered so many errors in spelling and grammar (the guy clearly has no idea what tense means) I would not subject myself to any more abuse.

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SookieLee725 reads

That's the first thing I noticed!

Posted By: inicky46
The review is so poorly written I could only get two lines into it before Conan discovered so many errors in spelling and grammar (the guy clearly has no idea what tense means) I would not subject myself to any more abuse.

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Blowing Chunks497 reads

Do you consider yourself more an asian or a caucasian,  or right in the middle?  

A lot of my friends seem to refer to my half half friends as asian guy or asian girl.  They hardly recognize the caucasian part at least in terms of when describing to other friends.  Do you see this happening too?  

It's also evident in TER reviews,  your profile says asian while the caucasian part is completely tossed out the window. I'm starting to think maybe this implies that Americans consider themselves insignificant compared to asians cuz they keep forgetting their own half.  Lmao  
:D

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GaGambler635 reads

Americans all consider me Asian, while actual Asians consider me American. Since I know more Americans than Asians, I just go along with the flow and call myself Asian.

Being born and raised here with mainly white/black/brown people as my peer group, I personally consider myself American, but my slanted eyes are tough to discount. Since there is very little remaining racism towards most Asians today, unlike the days of my youth where I was constantly forced to either eat shit or take on guys with 75 lbs of body weight on me, or sometimes several. I really don't spend much time today thinking about it.

I think if you start looking for it you will find it's your American friends that will refer to us "breeds" as Asian, while very few actual Asian people will do so.

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GaGambler621 reads

I got about as far as you did, after a couple of sentences my head hurt and I saw no benefit to subjecting myself to any more abuse either.

Angel's posts, or even blablablue's are easier to follow.

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Blowing Chunks707 reads

I met natasha a while ago. Gorgeous girl. I never wrote a review though.  

Maybe next time I see her I'll write one but I need some coaching from Doopy and BM on novel writing and use of thesaurus. lol

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MasterZen650 reads

I clicked through to see Natasha's pretty pictures instead. No more headache! :)

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silvertongue1476 reads

And in this case, that is so true!!!!

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MikeShanahan791 reads

NAtasha is amaaaaaaazing. Her rates not so much lol

Posted By: silvertongue1
And in this case, that is so true!!!!

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Jacque_Jenesais741 reads

It was actually interesting how he spelled out the experience using imagery. Definitely not 5th grade writing!

Reminds me of the movie I attached!

Related Link: A Beautiful Mind

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GaGambler753 reads

Three giant blocks of text just gives me a headache.

You're right, it's not 5th grade writing. Most 5th graders have learned how to use a paragraph break by that age. How did you even manage to read the whole thing? To be "descriptive" it has to be written so that the  average person can actually get further than a couple of sentences before concluding that whatever is at the end of the story isn't worth the painful journey required to get there.

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Jacque_Jenesais665 reads

The punctuation didn't help lol

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GaGambler658 reads

That would be one possible explanation as to how you were able to subject yourself to such punishment for no real reward.

As for me, I never even got far enough to notice the punctuation. The only thing he could have done to create a bigger headache would have been to type it in all Caps.

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Jacque_Jenesais630 reads

Lol nice. Good interpretation of the action lol

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cspatz629 reads

... all I see is a cement block.

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hiddenhills542 reads

Im interested in knowing how you stumbled across it. And like the others, way to long to read, and when I saw only one paragraph break, as I scrolled down the review, I quickly hit the back button.

BTW, if you want to read interesting reviews try pauliewalnuts, another LA hobbyist. Remember it's,  LA and screenwriters do hobby.

Posted By: Drunken Asian
Not necessarily in terms of length but more about the way it was written.  Even our thesaurus friend Duplicitous can learn a thing or two from this guy. :D  
   
 http://www.theeroticreview.com/reviews/showReview.asp?Review=860463  
   
 

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BigPapasan605 reads

...but after 156 reviews, he still writes the same way.

Related Link: BM68's most recent review

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inicky46633 reads

For the following line:

"She took my shaft deep in mouth and licked it with her poultry lips."

"Poultry lips?"  I guess he meant "pouty," but still.....It conjured up this image...

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inicky46534 reads

He gave it a quick scan and his eye just happened to fall on the "poultry lips."  Satan only knows what other gems still lurk there, undiscovered.

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Blowing Chunks597 reads

Posted By: inicky46
For the following line:  
   
 "She took my shaft deep in mouth and licked it with her poultry lips."  
   
 "Poultry lips?"  I guess he meant "pouty," but still.....It conjured up this image....  
 

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