The only thing I might add is your location. In the about me section it does say you are from NY but you might want to be more clear that you are offering your services in NY itself.  Just my opinion.....

Being a former proof-reader, some language/spelling issues popped out at me but 99% of the people reading your copy won't care. The photos look good and you have a good balance of info to photos.

Stay updated on your travel calendar and all should be good. Be gently persistent in seeking additional reviews and, if you're going to expand your travel cities, come to Portland (Oregon that is

Hi,

I'd suggest turning off the music, or have it come on very low volume.  Some of us peruse in public-ish places.

I agree with the other posters.  The music should go.  Never want to get a prospect busted while he's browsing!
The spelling and grammar issues aren't that big a deal for me, but your gallery says "2016" which might make some think you're not active anymore.  I'd suggest removing the date or post some more recent photos.

You're very attractive!  We may need to meet sometime!

Pretty photos..... A suggestion on the rates though.
There is always discussion here about basic rate and a VIP rate that many girls offer (VIP is higher).  
One can imagine what VIP means and it can be a turn off.... (when it is a higher rate)

Your site has "Standard VIP" which is cheaper than the "GFE" rate.  
I assume the GFE includes VIP but it could be confusing.... best to maybe spell that out

Ciao

i can agree, i went ahead and fixed that for personal reasons,i was trying to keep it sepreate just because certain guys like certain thing s, so i've decied to keep it simple, HH , FH , & my gfe sensual encounter . simple